Comments on: Haiku: Static Electricity http://blog.gordaen.com/2008/02/04/haiku-static-electricity/ Ramblings about art, education, Linux and a lot more Sun, 07 Sep 2008 07:07:25 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.6 By: Ian Clifton http://blog.gordaen.com/2008/02/04/haiku-static-electricity/#comment-98223 Ian Clifton Thu, 15 May 2008 06:11:26 +0000 http://blog.gordaen.com/2008/02/04/haiku-static-electricity/#comment-98223 Hmm, it could be that way, but I feel like that breaks the line up a little more as far as how it flows. The way I wrote it, each line stands reasonably on its own, but they each flow at more-or-less the same rate. Your version works well alone but I'm not sure about within the poem. I don't think I've slept enough lately to comprehend the subtleties at the moment. Hmm, it could be that way, but I feel like that breaks the line up a little more as far as how it flows. The way I wrote it, each line stands reasonably on its own, but they each flow at more-or-less the same rate. Your version works well alone but I’m not sure about within the poem. I don’t think I’ve slept enough lately to comprehend the subtleties at the moment.

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Part of my education was in physics and my logical thinking says that the second line should be:

static — the build-up unseen

Robert

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